By Pierson
“What? Huh?” I said sleepily as my excited little brother woke me. I wiped the drool off my face and looked out the widow. Instantly I was awake as I gazed out of the plexi glass window at tiny green spots that were dotted along the famous Nha Trang Bay.
Until this moment I thought that it was too good to be true: to be going to Vietnam. I mean, we had been planning this trip for almost a year but until now it was like a distant fairy tale land. As I looked out the window of the 737, I realized that so many kids in this amazing country would not be visiting a different city, let alone a different country, this spring. The thought was unsettling and I wiped it from my mind.
The plane started its slow descent into Nha Trang airport. Even the tiny airport that we have in Sun Valley was bigger than this one.
At this time we were taxiing to the…wait there is no gate! I was puzzled. My puzzlement was soon gone as we stopped in the middle of the tarmac and the stewardesses started speaking at what seemed like 100 miles an hour and the doors opened slowly. I got out of my seat with the Vietnamese women that sat next to me and started down the aisle.
As we exited the plane a tsunami of heat, humidity and…a touch of sea breeze hit me. I saw a bus in front of us. We walked down the steps of the plane and boarded the bus.
When we got to the crowded baggage claim I noticed a person holding a little white piece of construction paper that said our names and the name of the resort we were staying at in bold letters. I went over to my mom excitedly and told her. We got our baggage and went outside where a bus was waiting in a dirt parking lot. We got in and were greeted by to women that gave us little hot damp rags that smelled of lemon.
We drove for about a half an hour on this steep mountain side. I was filled with expectation when we entered the first town on the way to our resort. It was a very sad scene; there were kids playing in the street. Their houses were nothing more than a little room that they slept in.
In a few minutes we entered the town that we were going to we saw a different scene, a scene with a hotel lined street and taxi cabs and motorcycles everywhere. Beyond them, the beautiful sun-glazed ocean was not more than a stone’s throw away from the four-lane highway that we were driving on.
Suddenly we turned into a gate and two chauffeurs opened the door of the van.
Suddenly I was in a different world. The four star resort that surrounded me was complete with a little pool that had exotic fish swimming in it, an open air lobby with a breath-taking view on to the sandy beach.
This was going to be a crazy trip.
lukas (unauthenticated)
Dec 13, 2009 8:15 AM
Pierson, I really liked your story about going to Vietnam. I liked how you said "but until know it was like a distant fairy tale land". In the four star resort were the exotic fish swimming under your feet? And I could not find a very good picture in my mind about the exotic fish so I thought that you could of written more about the exotic fish. Otherwise your story was very good and had a lot of details.
Hannah Conn (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 2:54 PM
Pierson,
I loved your story. The way you described Vietnam and the ocean were amazing. I felt like you transported me to Vietnam in your story. I thought it was a really cool thing to do in your story. I loved the way you had transitions that were very descriptive. I can tell you put a lot of work into this, and it was really good. One thing you could have done was to not say words close together, like...
Suddenly we came to the tree. Suddenly a man stepped out from behind it. But you only did that a couple times so I think it was awesome. It was a really cool and special story and now I want to go to Vietnam.
Hannah
Ryan (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 2:54 PM
Pierson-
This story was awesome! I can't imagine how much fun it could have been. Your detail was really great, and you had a large vocabulary. The pictures were great, and went along with your story. Word like sun-glazed, and breath-taking made it all the better. Im very jealous now. Of your trip and your writing. I guess you could have edited a little better, but other than that, great job. I loved it.
Ryan
Emily Siegel (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 2:55 PM
Pierson I love how you told us how you felt when you where there. could you tell us more about the diffrents between the city and the resort . But other then that it was great! I love you pictures.
Parker Jones (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 2:56 PM
Pierson great story, I liked how you described the hotel and that it was a four star hotel and the part where you wipped the slobber of your face. Amazing story!!!!!! p.s. I wish I was going there for spring break this year.
Dane (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 2:56 PM
Pierson, I liked how discripted you were. I also loved your story. I feel sad for the kids you saw. I would like to here more about your trip.
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Dec 14, 2009 2:57 PM
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Alex Feldman (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 3:00 PM
hey prickly p!
Great story with lots of awesome details and pictures! you might wanna write more about the fish though because that would've been pretty cool! Great story, nice descriptions and remember: "but until now; it was like a distant fairy tale land." I love it ;)
colby (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 3:01 PM
i like the part where you wiped the drool of your face. good discription. one question what were the rags for?
Samie!!! (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 3:08 PM
I think that your story was really good, but I think you could of had a little more of conclusion.
I liked the description of the Island.
Tom Gillespie (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 3:08 PM
Pierson, awesome details with dope pictures i love the part where you were hit with a tsunami of heat and stuff like that. great story
Tom the bomb =)
Darby (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 3:08 PM
I loved your story. You made me want to go the Vietnam. I think you had very good description and I think you should have wrote about what you actually did there. GREAT JOB!!!!!!!
-Darby
Jay (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 3:12 PM
Dear Lexi,
Hi Lexi, you really used very discriptive words and they really painted a picture in my mind. it also sound s like a big huge poem.
ps. that is a good thing.
Jay (feeling bad...) (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 3:14 PM
That comment was meant for Lexi, not Pierson. I get confused, even though I have a huge head.
Jay Thaddeus Fitzgerald
Braden (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 3:15 PM
Pierson,
I really liked your story. You used really descriptive words and lots of detail. I liked it and keep up the good work.
-braden
Jau (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 3:19 PM
Dear Peirson,
i really enjoyed reading your story. You used very discriptive words they really put a picture in my mind. Good job.
henry (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 3:19 PM
i like you discription and point of view
Evan Rocks!!!! :) (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 3:20 PM
hey Pierson,
You sound like you had a great spring break like me! For my spring break, i went to France instead. Not Paris(i went there this summer) but Provance. I stayed in a house that my mom strangely found, and it was pretty fun. I got to sleep in this little mini one room house that is about 50 feet from the main house with my sister, and although i woke up to her having a neck spazam, i enjoyed it. So anyways, i loved your story. You must of been excited to be there! Here's my questions though: could you expand the story? then it would be even better! Also, what does the 2nd picture have to do with an airport? it looks more like something to do with trains!
Great job anyways!!
From,
Evan(who rocks!!!)
carson:) (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 3:22 PM
i loved your story it rely panted a pic in my mind. what did you do ther
Blair (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 3:22 PM
Pierson,
Wow!! I didnt know you were capable of this!((in a good way) I ran out of words to describe this all i have to say is.WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!WOW!
Blair
Nico (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 3:26 PM
Pierson
It sounds like vietnam is a lot like The Phillipines and that makes me wanna go there. You had very good descriptive with your story and your experience sounds amazing
good job p-diddy Nico
Eliza (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 4:25 PM
Pierson,
That was really good. I liked the way you ended the story with "this was going to be a crazy trip" It made me wonder what happened on your trip. You also had great detail. The way you started the story really drew me into your story. That was great!
Eliza
Curtis Griffin
Dec 14, 2009 4:42 PM
Pierson that is one of the greatest story I've ever read(and trust me I've read a lot of story's)
-Griffin
Jack (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 4:52 PM
Hey Pierson,
I thought you did a great job, you also had great description. I want to hear a lot more on your story.
Good job
Jack
P.S sorry i didn't get to go with your family and my family the next year.
max (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 5:05 PM
Great job pierson you were very discriptive how well you gave me pictures. It must have been great.
Max
Keegan Whitelaw (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 5:26 PM
Pierson,
Oh my gosh Pierson, when I Read this I thought 'wow this will be greater then mine will be.' It was
great!!! It was detailed a lot and I loved it! I like how you said "I wiped the drool off my face and
looked out the widow. Instantly I was awake as I gazed out of the plexi glass window at tiny green spots
that were dotted along the famous Nha Trang Bay". That what I thought was great and detailed and got a
good pitcure in my head, also I could see you getting off the plane. Thats sad how the kids were playing
in the street. Pierson that was great and keep up the good work!!!!!!! P.S how was the rest of the trip?
Your friend, Keegan
Hope Perkins (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 5:52 PM
Pierson,
Your story was great. I like the part when you smell a touch of ocean breeze. You were very dicriptive I thought. Poor Vietnamese people! Anyway, I really liked your story.
-Hope
Garrett (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 6:11 PM
Pierson, your story was awesome. I felt like i was there with you. the start was really funny and i liked how you made it like that. you were very descriptive. one of my questions was what were the kids playing. also i liked how you had a big vocab. i think you could have used different starting words. other than that i thought it was awesome.
Your friend Garrett
Lilly (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 6:57 PM
Pierson-
Wow! that's an amazing story. I love the choice of words you have. Also, I love all the description. Like how you felt and how you described your surroundings. I love the pictures especially the one that had a whole lot of people in it. You did though have some mistakes. One was widow instead of window, but it's your story so you may have put it in there like that.
Lilly
Kristian (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 7:33 PM
Pierson, Ithat was was a amazing story. I have had those fellings too, just waiting and waiting and then you are really there.
That is so cool that you went to Vietnam. In the town there were so many people. The story was so good. Did you eve3r go sswimming in the water or wass it to cold.
Wave (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 7:37 PM
Pierson, you put in alot of detail and I felt like i was there in the plane and at Vietnam with you. It was awesome.
Theo (unauthenticated)
Dec 14, 2009 10:01 PM
Pierson
I really liked your story and thought that it was really descriptive. There was one sentence that didn't make sense to me
sarah (unauthenticated)
Dec 15, 2009 2:13 PM
Pierson,
I really liked your story. nice description. I bet you had a great trip. Its cool that vietnam changes so quickly. You really made me be able to see the airplane and the vietnameese woman. Good Job. PS sorry about the horrible spelling. I forget how to spell vietnam
Tripp (unauthenticated)
Dec 15, 2009 2:21 PM
Pierson nice story it was cool how you described the 2 different cities you saw and how poor one was and the other wealthy. lots of great pictures they really gave me the feel of Vietnam
sean (unauthenticated)
Dec 15, 2009 2:27 PM
it is soo cool to vist a famous beach and great ditials
Jackie (unauthenticated)
Dec 15, 2009 6:24 PM
I really liked your story and I thought it was really creative when you said "As we exited the plane a tsunami of heat, humidity and…a touch of sea breeze hit me." It also must have been so much fun to go to vietnam and see a lot of exciting things.
Olivia Ott (unauthenticated)
Dec 15, 2009 6:35 PM
Dear Pierson,
I loved your story! It drew me right in like a fish on a hook. You were very descriptive and clear on your feelings and the sights. I loved the way you told the story and the way it kept me interested. I could just see you sitting there, getting your fist glimpse of vietnam. The story was just like you and I could see you sitting there, writing the story. I hope you keep writing. I can't wait to read more of your writing!
-Olivia
Lexi :( felling bad (unauthenticated)
Dec 16, 2009 8:41 PM
Hi Nighthawk!
sorry about not commenting sooner, i would try at study but it wouldn't work and then i would forget at home! This was amazing, and i had a grin on my face the whole time while i read it. I would say you should share more in class, but you already share almost everyday! i guess i just wish i could here more of your writing. you have serious skills as a writer, and you could, no, will (that is if you want to) become a pro.
Keep up the squawking (on paper) Nighthawk!